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11-08-2009, 03:25 PM
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Cybroxis, a couple of people threw your idea off in another thread as ridiculous, but I think some really nice storylines have been made up here. good job all, & kudos to you cybroxis for starting it.
 
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11-08-2009, 04:38 PM
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Your stories are nice of course but what you said in the shoutbox was just too harsh. Also the reason you weren't recognized there is because noone visits the site yet.
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06-03-2010, 07:23 PM
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The Vak'ti
Once, in a land far gone and long lost to history, a mysterious place existed. There were those that lived below, cast out and shunned by prideful beings above, forever going about their daily torment, living with it as best as they could. Never understood by others outside their slightly fragmented race, as they were thrown down into the pit, they finally had found a family.
With time, old hatreds and old bonds shifted. The roles had been flipped. Their race, banned for millenia, had changed into something not quite Kormin. To be seen would be a horrific site to behold. However, although many saw these creatures as "undead", they are not evil, nor really dead. In fact, it was the "creatures" above, they say, that warped them into their now strange forms. Before, only pariahed by their peers in thoughts and ideas, now they truly were different, able to be marked out physically with the naked eye. not only had they no antennae nor hands, but they also lacked eyes, ironically more aware of their surroundings than those above, who possessed the luxury of light. Their ears, although not extremely large, could compete with a dog's for their pitch. They cupped around at the top and ended in a sharp curve at the bottom, a "v", in such a strange way that was also unnaturally perfect. But the characteristic most noticeable would be the white carapace which surrounds their humanoid form, not quite slimy, but not an exoskeleton either. Not quite invincable, but the equivalent of a shield - it could withstand a broadhead's impact or 2 days in a scorching oven. This skin is the best physical characteristic to represent them. It required understanding of their past and the suffering the Vak'ti endured for so many years, chafing at their very souls until they became as hard as a stone drenched in sunlight for decades. This was also required of them if they were to survive in the bowels of Dera'Mur. But now, possessed of a single purpose and propogating for thousands of years underneath their oppressors, the Vak'ti were prepared to take back their rightful lands from the Kormin, who had, to the Vak'tis' atvantage, forgotten their existence after all these years. The drums of war were sounded, battle plans laid, and the drills started. What came next was laid into history, an event to rack the world with its magnitude and intensity for all time....
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A cyber-optic snake (half-dracula) Last edited by cybroxis : 06-03-2010 at 09:07 PM. Reason: grammar error
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06-04-2010, 06:59 AM
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um, I have never seen this thread before - can we have a re-hash of what it is for please? [explanation].
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06-04-2010, 09:16 AM
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06-04-2010, 09:59 AM
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My English is not the best but i will try to write at least a bit.
Title : Mythador, Legends of time Charakters that are in the story yet : Althanir ( Elf sorc adept ) Erethear ( Althanirs friend and an Elf sorc adept too ) Tharaden ( The Teacer and master from Althanir and Erethear, he is one of the mighiest wizzards in the land ) Intro Book 1 , page 1 It just need peace and harmony to bring destruction and corruption... Even the longest peace has an end. Even the peaceful people can become Warlords. Even the time has an end... An end, that will come over every world, every race and every country... But not now... Book 1 page 2 Althanir ? Wake up ! Althanir waked up and watched at Erethear, his friend. Althanir was a young Elf adept, he was learning the ways of Magic together with his friend Erethear. How late is it ? Im damn tired ! We have to go if we dont want to come to late, said his friend. Wait a moment i have to look for my clothes... Guy ! Tharaden will be very angry with us if we come to late again ! Tharaden was their Master, he teached them everything he knew. He was one of the mightiest Wizzard in the Land. Im ready said Althanir and both where on the way to the Academy. Althanir watched into the heaven and was sank in thoughts. Just 2 Weeks Althanir ! 2 Weeks and we are real Wizzards ! Yes we are, answered Althanir. Althanir thought about nothing else since they became Adepts. A real Wizzard... a mighty wizzard..... A bit later they arrived at the Academy. Althanir ! Erethear ! You are to late ! Tharaden awaited them. We are sorry master but... No ! I dont want to hear your talk out of ! Tharaden was a strict teacher, but a very good one. This is the 4th time in a row, but if you want to be real Wizzars you cant allow yourselves coming to late ! Now let us start ! Althanir and his friend followed him and started the training. Ok guys, i know this is not the best english and not the best start of a story, but its just my first try and im not finished yet 
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06-04-2010, 10:26 AM
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continuation
Book 1 page 2 Althanir knewed this procedure. First he had to do simple casts, then Tharaden asked him about the history of casting and about the first Wizzards that brought the Magic into Mythador. After that Althanir had to do some harder casts. But it was easy to do for him. Nice Althanir ! But you know that Casting isnt just waving the Hands ! It has to do with your mind too, you need a strong mind and much concentration if you want become one of the best. Tharaden wasnt impressed but at least he was satisfied. Now you Erethear. Erethear did the same like Althanir. You became really good Erethear, you trained didnt you ? Oh, yes Master, answered Erethear. You both are really good. You dont need to fear the final examination. After a couple of hours Althanir and Erethear were on the way home. They had to cross a forest. The forest isnt threatening but this time Althanir feeled something.... a dark pressence. Althanir ? Is something wrong ? Nothing he answered. Its nothing... But Erethear knewd Althanir good and he feeled something dark too. They walked along a path through the forest, they used that path every time but it seems something is different know... Althanir ? Yes ? Althanir was watching at Erethear. You do feel something dark too, or not ? You did noticed that, so yes i do... We shouldnt stop walking, im sure its a test from our Master, if we can keep the rest. Youre right Althanir, said Erethear and they moved further. Wait ! hm ... ? What is it Erethear ? I think i saw something over there ! No i dont think that... But look ! Erethear did not even let Althanir finished his sentence. Now Althanir saw it too. A dark shine. The young elves were going toward. The Pressence they feeled all the way was much stronger now. continue follows... So thats my start of the Story. Its maybe ( as i said before ) not the best english and story start but im still not finished. I got lots of Ideas how to continue it.
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#38
06-04-2010, 12:03 PM
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Cybroxis and blackfall, You both have interesting stories and I would like you to continue them.
Blackfall your English isn't too bad, just some minor spelling. A lot of Americans whose English is their first language is worse (I now a lot). Ever hear of ebonics ?
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06-04-2010, 12:19 PM
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i have much time this weekend, so i definetly ( xD ) will write more
But im happy that my story is not that bad
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06-04-2010, 12:36 PM
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 Just gotta check through this thread and see if it is worthy of seeing my words
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